sorry i haven't been around in awhile. here's my song that i've been working on for a long time. too long. now it's done.
California.
we walked the santa monica strip
and watched our bare feet slip
under tidal waves and wet sands.
it felt like we were the first
in the universe
to love in California
you're the oldest trick in the book
and i'm iliterate
(you were the one that started it!)
(you were the one that started it!)
and the sun couldn't outshine us indoors
my first time alone out state
you know i couldn't wait
to stay at home with you and screw the sites!
but it felt like a tortured death
a black veiled LAX
a kiss, a don't, a tear, a female tear
you're the olderst trick in the book
and i'm iliterate
(you were the one that started it)
(you were the one that started it)
and the sun couldn't outshine us indoors
i guess we all need more theatrics to keep you all interested and entertained.
i guess we all need more theatrics to keep you all interested and entertained.
i guess we all need more theatrics to keep you all interested and entertained.
you're the olderst trick in the book
and i'm iliterate
(you were the one that started it)
(you were the one that started it)
and the sun couldn't outshine us indoors
to listen to my songs for SSC click here http://www.myspace.com/impossibleobjects
:D it's great to have you back, geoffrey :D
and again I'm falling for a song of yours...... it's really clever and unique and sweet and creative
I mean....... I like it......... a lot :wink:
all these amazing things like
"it felt like we were the first
in the universe
to love in California"
"you're the oldest trick in the book
and i'm iliterate"
"and the sun couldn't outshine us indoors"
"i guess we all need more theatrics to keep you all interested and entertained."
.........
thanks for sharing!
cheers,
bluenightangel
"oh, eventually it will break your heart" - anders wendin
Awesome. As BN said, it is very unique and has lots of very good lines (all of the ones BN quoted were my favorites.)
Keep it up!
There's a thin fine line between hate and rage.
Now watch the line be crossed and break!
Reads very well to me - only place I got a little confused was here....
but it felt like a tortured death
a black veiled LAX
a kiss, a don't, a tear, a female tear
I love the 3rd line, I just don't get the second....what's LAX?
and I really hope you meant this .....
"you're the olderst trick in the book
and i'm iliterate"
Oldest.....illiterate.....if you didn't mean it, I hope it was just bad typing!!!!
"a kiss, a don't, a tear, a female tear"....
I hope I've got this right, and it's meant to be the subtle opposite of "Doe, a deer, a female deer".....
:D :D :D
Vic
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
Welcome Back,
I like the song, but how does it fit the assignment?
Do you have a quote that inspired this?
Good stuff
John
my quote was "the oldest trick in the book." maybe that's not cliche... i couldn't quit think if it was or not.
and LAX is the Los Angelas Airport in Cali.
yes it was "oldest"
yes i was playing off "doe, a deer, a female deer."
thanks for yer comments. i really was thinking the chorus may be stupid because there is a very fine line between genius and total retardedness. i couldn't tell which and realising i wrote it assumed the worst.
to listen to my songs for SSC click here http://www.myspace.com/impossibleobjects
Works for me........
:D :D :D
Vic
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
Works for me........
:D :D :D
Vic
Yeah What Vic said
John
