Since Dylan went through all that trouble of picking a song title for me . . .
and even though we weren't supposed to do the verses . . . I was having a good time . . .
Whiskey Breath Blues
Chorus
I've got (the) whiskey breath blues
From drinkin' a cheap brand of booze
It's not my fault
I can't afford a good single malt
And it's given me whiskey breath blues
I've got (the) whiskey breath blues
And feelin' I've got nothin' to lose
I've got no friends
It seems my trouble never ends
Everybody knows me as ‘bad news'
Beth won't even kiss me no more
No, she won't let me kiss her no more
I'm done doing crack
But ever since I come back
Beth won't let me kiss her no more
She shoves me away when I try
It's enough to make a grown man cry
I don't understand
I'm a rehabilitated, reformed man
But she still won't kiss me no more
I waited ‘til she drunk a few
And remembered to spit out my chew
But when I gone for a kiss
She ducked and I missed
Beth won't let me kiss her no more
I bought her more drinks of straight whiskey
Hoping she'd start feeling frisky
But ever time I tried
She pushed my face aside
Beth won't let me kiss her no more
I brought her candies and a flower
Cut my nose hair, shaved, and took a shower
So I didn't know what to think
When she told me “You stinkâ€
But I knew I wasn't gettin' none no more. (or) But it's enough to drive a poor man to drink.
KR2
It's the rock that gives the stream its music . . . and the stream that gives the rock its roll.
This is one of Vic's titles:
I Should Take My Own Advice
I should take my own advice
And tell her this can't go on
But when I start to think of her
Any common sense I had is gone
I should take my own advice
What we're doing isn't right
But rational thinking is overruled
By thoughts of kissing her tonight
I'll try to do one more . . . . manana . . . who's the lucky person? :mrgreen:
KR2
It's the rock that gives the stream its music . . . and the stream that gives the rock its roll.
Ken,
Looking good on both :D
even though we weren't supposed to do the verses . . . I was having a good time . . .
I agree. Don't bottle that muse.....If she wants to sing a song, sit back with pencil in hand and enjoy the ride.
James
This song title is from Jerboa
A Friend I Can Do Without
A friend I can do without
Is one that steals my wife
One that sneaks behind my back
And ruins my whole life
A friend I can do without
Is one who can't be trusted
The kind that hits you from behind
And leaves you broke and busted
KR2
It's the rock that gives the stream its music . . . and the stream that gives the rock its roll.
Ken, what can I say? Great job on Whisky Breath Blues - I'm thinking you've got a real, gen-you-wine country blues there, mate. I'd do it as a slow blues - but that's me, and my preference. I can SMELL the Whisky....perhaps I better put the lid back on the bottle!
The other two?
Pretty near perfect for the assignment....can't pick holes in anything you've written. Great stuff, Ken - you've set the rest of us a high standard to aim for. Really, excellent writing - thanks for posting 'em!
:D :D :D
Vic
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
Thanks, Vic and James.
I haven't learned ANYTHING yet about how to play the blues . . .
so if anyone can do anything with the lyrics . . . yours.
KR2
It's the rock that gives the stream its music . . . and the stream that gives the rock its roll.
KR
"The Blues ain't nothing but a good man feeling bad about the loss
of a good woman" B.B.King
Anyways Good Job on all 3.
"I Should Take My Own Advice" and "A Friend I Can Do Without"
sound like they could be two perspectives on the same story.
:note1: :note1: :note1:
John
Ken,
A Friend I Can Do Without
Looks good as well :D
James
Ken, what can I say? Great job on Whisky Breath Blues - I'm thinking you've got a real, gen-you-wine country blues there, mate. I'd do it as a slow blues - but that's me, and my preference. I can SMELL the Whisky....perhaps I better put the lid back on the bottle!
What can I say...You need a great title to make a good song... :roll: From your previous offerings, I knew you would do this one proud!
The others are nicely written too.
Rock on!
D 8)
I'm nowhere near Chicago. I've got six string, 8 fingers, two thumbs, it's dark 'cos I'm wearing sunglasses - Hit it!
But when I gone for a kiss
She ducked and I missed
:lol:
I'll second everybody else, this is great!
Thanks for sharing :D
straycat.
"oh, eventually it will break your heart" - anders wendin
Ooh, you did get carried away there, it all fits together so well though.
I'd have to say "But it's enough to drive a poor man to drink." could be the better ending, the irony in that is great.
Like the others too :)
I'd have to say "But it's enough to drive a poor man to drink." could be the better ending, the irony in that is great.
agreed! it's just a fitting ending for that song
A Friend I Can Do Withoutthat's why my best friend is my teddy bear
Jeremy
And my Soundclick Page to listen to my song submissions: http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=903876
Ken,
Looking good on both :D
even though we weren't supposed to do the verses . . . I was having a good time . . .
I agree. Don't bottle that muse.....If she wants to sing a song, sit back with pencil in hand and enjoy the ride.
James
Off-topic, but I wondered what you were talking about- bottling mice, then re-read that sentence. :)
Take care,
Casey
Off-topic, but I wondered what you were talking about- bottling mice, then re-read that sentence. :)
Yep, that would be silly . . . everybody knows . . . bottling mice . . .
hampsters :mrgreen: their ability to contribute lyrics.
KR2
It's the rock that gives the stream its music . . . and the stream that gives the rock its roll.
