Hi All
Well here it is mid week and and I see my time for songwriting fading as the week continues. I'll post this unfinished work and hope somebody is kind enough to comment and offer some direction.
Remberance Stone
You're just a small momento
Of a time not long ago
A restaurant by the ocean
The warming campfire glow
She and I together
In a calm and quiet place
You ask me to remember
The nights in her embrace
Remembrance stone you taunt me
When I am feeling blue
And when I'm sad or angry
I can always count on you
Rememberance stone you taught me
When Life gets in the way
To bring her close and hold her
There will be another day
Celt
Nice post I like the song! Just needs to be a little longer thats all!
Keep up the good work
Bstguitarist
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Hey Celt,
I like this one. Did this stone come from the same place that inspired your "Beach Rose" ?
Anyways, 2 more verses, I think would round it out nicely. I'm not sure of how I'd approach the progression of thought. I'm not sure if you're thinking of 2 choruses, or a 2-part chorus, but were it me (which it never, ever is) , I think I'd repeat the first chorus, and use the second one for the ending., in a v c v c v c or v v c v c structure. Anyways, so far it's great. Quite often, I'll get enough to post something then plan on finishing it out later, and later never seems to come around. (It's always now, all the time.) But before I wax tangential, let me just say that I hope later visits you on this one. I'd love to see the finished version.
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Yes Scratch Same trip that inspired Beach Rose. You're good Nice catch
Anyways I hope to get back to this before Sunday but Life goes on and I've been busy lately. Thanks for the comments (You too Bst) Hoping for another verse or two. I don't know if The Muse is not speaking or if I'm not listening.
If anybody has a good cure for writers block Let me know
Celt
If anybody has a good cure for writers block Let me know Fishing. Even if it doesn't cure the writer's block, who cares? You're fishing!
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hey celt,
nice to read stuff of yours again.
nice and sweet sentiment. maybe you could mention how you came about getting the stone itself. otherwise i have no ideas for you. :oops: sorry. i am so much help here.
If anybody has a good cure for writers block Let me know
if i knew the answer to this i wouldn't have gone so many weeks without my own song post. :( :oops: i would probably write a book and make lots of money. :D but alas, i am at a loss with you. :cry: maybe i will be able to post something this week. keep your fingers crossed for me everyone.
hopefully we will get to see a finished version of this song. great start here. don't let this one get lost in the shuffle.
-CheapThrill
:) maybe a verse what could happen on another day ? maybe but it is very nice
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