well.. since i never write lyrics first.. i will this time. and see where this takes me. (edited)
a pillow army awaits mine.
dreams erase memory
and i'm mothered for the second time.
a wave of cloth, my cloak from light.
i'd rather not wake up
i'd rather be smothered to life.
a creature of comfort.
a force field unseen.
like warmth from the sun
a silent me covered in dreams.
a waisted life.
a past of regret.
is what i will leave behind
is what i will sleep to forget.
bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed
bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed
bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed
bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed bed
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Nie attempt but I really do not like the "Bed Bed Bed" part, it just doesnt flow. Also, there are other parts in the song that need to be cleaned up to make it flow. and mabye a little longer. I also do not understand the " Im mothered for a second time" part, what is that? Once again though, nice try for just starting out here. Just work on it some more and it will be fine!
Keep up the good work,
Bstguitarist,
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The repetition of "bed", I'm guessing, will flow or not, based on the music. Much the same way groups in the 60's used "Yeah, yeah, yeah". Although, when I read it, I was instantly reminded of the bedtime song on They Might Be Giant's album NO!
It always takes me a few reads to get your stuff. Still working on the 3rd verse, but I like what you've done so far. I especially liked the "smothered to life" line. Very clever.
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I like this. Gives me images of just pulling the sheets over my head and just enjoy the bed on a rainy Sunday morning, and letting life just pass by.
“ and I am mothered for the second time” Love this line.
A couple of more verses and you’ll have this one “made” :)
Blessings.
Olav
