Here are what Ive come up with so far
Kathriech - Before I Met You
(Pretty standard relationship stuff)
Before I met you life was fine
I sang and danced I drank the wine
And lovers I'd say I had a few
That was all before I met you
Chefie - Funny
( I was stumped on this one until David mentioned Warren Zevon)
Funny how you always said
I'd be the last to go
Funny how a twist of fate
Can end this one man show
Funny how you never know
What tomorrow has to bring
Funny how much yesterday
Doesn't mean a thing
Chris C
Annie's Couch
( I actually have a whole set of lyrics for this one but lets see where it goes.
Something along the lines of Bare Naked Ladies "Old Apartment" )
I sat down on Annie's couch
I sat right there and cried
Remembering every time I hurt her
Every time I lied
I sat down on Annie's couch
And shed more than a tear
If I had been less of a fool
Would Annie still be here?
John
Hi John
Strange as it may sound, Before I Met You reminded me of Nobody Knows You When You're Down And Out, simply because of the use of the word "wine," I think. This might easily become a kind of blues / Tin Pan Alley hybrid before it's done...
I really liked what you did with Funny. The second stanza especially is fine. The end of the first one might stand a little tweaking (I'm having trouble with the last two lines and the connecting "twist of fate" to "one man show"), but it's a good start.
And Annie's Couch is cool, too. Maybe I should submit these chorus lyrics (with slight changes, of course) as my own so you can submit your verse lyrics? :wink:
Of course, Bob's no slouch - he may have us all writing complete songs for the big Week 52 finale!
Peace
Hi John,
Before I met you life was fine
I sang and danced I drank the wine
And lovers I'd say I had a few
That was all before I met you
Pretty standard? , yes I would agree, but it does leave room for the next person to take this song anywhere really, which is a good thing in this exercise.
Funny how you always said
I'd be the last to go
Funny how a twist of fate
Can end this one man show
Funny how you never know
What tomorrow has to bring
Funny how much yesterday
Doesn't mean a thing
I really like what you've done here, good job.
I sat down on Annie's couch
I sat right there and cried
Remembering every time I hurt her
Every time I lied
I sat down on Annie's couch
And shed more than a tear
If I had been less of a fool
Would Annie still be here?
This also works for me, I might be inclined to change the 2nd to last line though
I sat down on Annie's couch
And shed more than a tear
And had I been less of a fool
Would Annie still be here?
Cheers
Paul
Hi John
Kathriech - Before I Met You
Before I met you life was fine
I sang and danced I drank the wine
And lovers I'd say I had a few
That was all before I met you
Great opening lines. :D I stumbled a bit on the third line, but nothing that a good singer or a bit of editing wouldn't fix.
Chefie - Funny
Funny how you always said
I'd be the last to go
Funny how a twist of fate
Can end this one man show
Funny how you never know
What tomorrow has to bring
Funny how much yesterday
Doesn't mean a thing
Top stuff! Kind of topical round our place too as we creak into the later years... :wink: The only line that stopped me a little was "Can end this one man show". I wanted to tweak it slightly - but I can't say how, or what to, so that's not much use I guess... :(
Chris C -Annie's Couch
I sat down on Annie's couch
I sat right there and cried
Remembering every time I hurt her
Every time I lied
I sat down on Annie's couch
And shed more than a tear
If I had been less of a fool
Would Annie still be here?
Splendid! :D Great to see the idea taken beyond the more obvious things that could have happened on Annie's couch.
Cheers,
Chris
Thanks All,
As far a any tweaking goes I see these a sketches an know that some body may be taking
these and developing them into a song let's leave that up to them.
Although I do like Paul's suggestion on Funny.
John
