hey guysthanks again for your comments, I will keep plunking away on it, i dont play an insterment or sing so well so unfortanitly there is no recordi...

I've had some more help on this song and wanted to post the latest versionI think its getting better.......but let me know what you think??? :wink: my...

i m finding it hard to follow the story i think you need to add more detail so the reader can see whats happening more clearlyyou could try visualizin...

the more i read this the more i like it .......waiting to see your rewrite :) i think this would sound good done in a Charlie Daniels style somthing...

Vic Lewisi have to agree with Kevin Love the first verse. Don't like the second verse much to be honest. i like what your trying to say but it need...

THANKS TREVOR I will be watching for your input. :wink: mystic

Barnabus Rockhad to look at this one a few times it keept callin me back hope you dont mind the few libertys that i took with your song :wink: mystic...

DillyDallyjust a thought on this verseYou said, " You dont even know me" well, i could chang that I cant promise you riches nor money But I can swear ...

smokindogi havent got anything solid in mind but i am thinking it might be good in a med to heavy rock but not realy sure what would you suggest ?? :...

trevorwell it looks you guys put me on the right track,thanks for the help, i think it reads much better, although i still feel it could end better ho...

thanks for your comments it helps a great deal ,no need for aploagies Trevor all critquies are good,for with out them its hard to improve. I will sit ...

Paulthanks for your input you have a good point and i will look at that and see if i can come up with a way to some how explain why she has no soul(i...