My Leopard
He watches
Waits
From his place on the wall
He's silent
Exquisite
No fear at all
Millions of dots, placed with care , on paper and suddenly he was there
I framed him and hung him on my wall, cos' he's my favorite picture of all
Eyes bright
Caring
Watching me sing
He's majestic
Inspiring
Such contentment he brings
Millions of dots, placed with care , on paper and suddenly he was there
I framed him and hung him on my wall, cos' he's my favorite picture of all
My leopard
Lying
In the branch of a tree
My leopard
Knowing
He's part of me
millions of dots, placed with care , on paper and suddenly he was there
I framed him and hung him on my wall, cos' he's my favorite picture of all
I have pasted him in as my pic , so you can see what an inspiring face he has!!!!! :wink:
Go well
Ja'mir :wink:
I am a cloud within a cloud http://www.justjamir.com
you can hear my songs at :
Yay!,... Jamir's back!
And true to form as well. I've seen the pic on your website, but I'm glad you included it anyways. This is (as always) quite good. And carries those nice short lines you like so well. The only thing I might change, would be to drop the "Made" and "So" from the last two lines. But,.. you may have a reason for keeping them there. Glad to see you back.
-- Scratch 8)
-- Scratch 8)
"...if heartaches were commercials, we'd all be on TV" -- John Prine
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Ta ever so Scratch, I have editted out the extra words, I do agree with you , they are not needed.
Good to be back .............
Go well
Ja'mir
I am a cloud within a cloud http://www.justjamir.com
you can hear my songs at :
Hey Ja'mir
Welcome back! I was just thinking the other day, " I wonder when we'll hear from Ja'mir again?"
I too have seen the picture on your website and can see why it's your favorite. And now it's been inspiration for your songwriting.
Great Work!
Celt
yes, welcome back, Ja'mir :D
...might sound a bit dumb now but I've seen that painting of yours on your homepage before, too:) proves that your homepage is popular, huh?
nice little song, though maybe not my favourite of yours but still charming.
take care
bluenightangel
"oh, eventually it will break your heart" - anders wendin
This is great, i love the short simple lines you use. i like the simple method my self LOL. :D :D btw I checked out your web site, its truly awsome :!: :!: :D I love the artwork, and the tunes are very good!!
the dog.
Soooo....loks like we've all checked out your website....
The song does justice to the picture, paints a nice mental image....and as I was looking at the pic, one of my dogs jumped up into my lap and barked at a passing stranger....then she saw the leopard pic and went totally berserk!!!!
One little thing I'd change...I'd drop the word "such" from the second verse, it's unneccessary....obviously, I have no idea of the music you have in mind for this, but i always try and put music to lyrics...even if it's only a very basic chord progression....
And "such" just stretches the line more than it should.....
Vic
Oh and welcome home by the way!!!.......don't stay away so long in future....
:D :D :D
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
