Wk 43 What You Think That I Want You To Say/Mp3 by Smokindog

Hi John,
When you tell me that your lies are fact
Should I look you in the eye
Or keep one eye on my back
Love this part!
When you tell me what you think that I want you to say
My brain is hurting, I'm having a real hard time wrapping my brain around this? That's not to be a put down. I find this line very interesting. Is it possible to be too clever, lol? Great job, G. :)

Hey John,
yeah I think it fits the assignmet fine. Boy Im lookin forward to hearing you sing this line:
When you tell me what you think that I want you to say Once youve got the rhythm is ok, I think :P . Im not wanting to be picky but its such a pivotal line Im wondering if this modification would make it flow better?
When you tell me what you think it is Im wanting you to say Hey nice song though :D.

cheers

pb

Hi John,

I was about to write something complementary but unfortunately my brain also popped at the words:

When you tell me what you think that I want you to say

After a short lie down and a restorative cup of tea the brain has come back on line and seems to be trying to tell me that this would be much easier to understand:

When you tell me what you think I want to hear

That is what you mean isn't it? And shorter is usually better in songs. Just a thought. :)

Cheers, Chris

Hi'a

As a package it is nice, there are a few lines I am stumbling over, but knowing how you always fit them in the the melodies you create, I will wait to hear before putting my foot in my mouth.
I do agree with Chris's suggestion of the change in the lines
When you tell me what you think that I want you to say

to

When you tell me what you think I want to hear

it makes it a lot easier oon the brain :oops:

Go well
Ja'mir

Easier on the brain, perhaps, but not as catchy. I kinda liked Celt's line, and the fact that it makes you have to stop and work it out. Means you'll never forget it. Only thing I don't like is the "that." I don't even like it when people use too many that's in regular conversation. That said, hehe, how about just changing:
When you tell me what you think that I want you to say

to:

When you tell me what you think I want you to say

Hi

Sorry if I hurt your brain, it was not my intention.
:oops:

The line in question has been kicking around in my head
for quite some time so I've gotten use to it.

I appreciate all the comments and efforts to make it
"easier on the brain"

My feeling are Joe has found the best solution the word
"that" makes alot of difference.

I think the edit should help and still retain the word play
I was looking for.

"THAT'S all Folks"
(Sorry I couldn't resist)

John

The celt on acoustic, vocals. Yours truly on bass, electric guitars, lap steel.
http://www.soundclick.com/guitarforumjams

hi

are you sure that is the Celt singing and not Bob Dylan ? 8) 8)

I love it this is fan-bloody-tastic :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol:

This is a great song with very fantastic lyrics and the music just blew me away :wink: :wink: :wink: :wink:

I am very very impressed , Just wish I could make music like that

well done ( the applause at the end is well deserved )

be nice :idea:
hilch

Thank's Dog

Very Good Job :!: Love the lap steel and the "live" effect.
You really caught the feel of a 60's coffee house. I can almost
smell the expresso.

Thank you too Hilch Smokindogs backing really helps this song

John

Ditto to what Hilch said.

Fantastic collaborative effort. An absolute delight to listen to. And once it was sung, the line about "what you think I want you to say" worked beautifully (as so often happens when the voice and music can bring the meaning of a lyric out).

I was about to say that it sounded like a cross between Dylan and Dire Straits. But even though that would be meant as a compliment it's probably better to say that it sounded like the Best of The Celt meets The best of Smokindog.

Both contributors now have a strong and well established personal style here, so I probably don't need to compare them to anybody else any more, now that I've listened to a fair bit of what they can both do.

Like Hilch said:
This is a great song with very fantastic lyrics and the music just blew me away

I am very very impressed , Just wish I could make music like that

well done ( the applause at the end is well deserved )

If I can claw my way up to that level of skill and talent I'll die happy. :D

Cheers, Chris

Thanks, glad you guys liked it :D I woukd love to get some more collaborations going like this one with some other GN musicians and writers. --the dog

Thanks, glad you guys liked it :D I woukd love to get some more collaborations going like this one with some other GN musicians and writers. --the dog

As soon as I think I'm good enough I'll be knocking on your door with cap in hand and big hopeful schoolboy grin on chops....

Not ready for that league yet though....

hi

are you sure that is the Celt singing and not Bob Dylan ? 8) 8)

I love it this is fan-bloody-tastic :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol:

This is a great song with very fantastic lyrics and the music just blew me away :wink: :wink: :wink: :wink:

I am very very impressed , Just wish I could make music like that

well done ( the applause at the end is well deserved )

be nice :idea:
hilch

Took the words right out of my mouth, Hilch....

:D :D :D :D :D

Vic