Hi All,
After much indecision I finally decided on Bob's version of gjbrake's
This Grudge,I'm Going To Hold.
My apoligies to Bob for messing with
his chorus a bit but I felt this wanted to be a Blues.
Bob's chorus:
This grudge, I'm going to hold - (gjbrake) (Bob)
I've tried to let you go
And let this fire grow cold
But I still burn deep inside
This grudge, I'm going to hold
This Grudge I'm Going To Hold ( Title - gjbrake) (Chorus - Bob)
I tried to let you go Babe
I tried to let this fire grow cold
I tried to let you go Babe
I tried to let this fire grow cold
But it still burns deep inside me
This time
This grudge I'm going to hold
He went and stole my woman
When he could have stole my gold
He went and stole my woman
When he could have stole my gold
But he took all that I held precious
So This time
This grudge I'm going to hold
I tried to let you go Babe
I tried to let this fire grow cold
I tried to let you go Babe
I tried to let this fire grow cold
But it still burns deep inside me
This time
This grudge I'm going to hold
I thought he was my best friend
Now I curse him one hundredfold
I thought he was my best friend
Now I curse him one hundredfold
He betrayed all that we held sacred
This time
This grudge I'm going to hold
This grudge I'm going to hold
This grudge I'm going to hold
Celt
Great stuff.
I had a vague idea of how I might write it when I had the title, but bob's chorus was completely different to that, and now your verses are completely different again.
And they are good! The bluesy thing suits it well too.
Good work again!
G
Listen Louder Than You Play
Celt,
Sounds good. The repetitiveness gives the sense of not being able to let go, I like it! G. :)
Hey Celt,
Great job. You can almost smell the smoke in the air!
Hey Celt,
I think we can forgive you for "messin round, messin round all the time" 8) with that chorus. This is great. This was always begging to be blues song. Keep up the good work. :D
pbee
Hie Celt
Can't complain about the alterations to the chorus when the end result works that well.
Good bluesy stuff :D
Interesting comment from gjbrake on where he envisioned the song going from the title and where it's now ended up. That's why I like this assignment.
Bob :wink:
You are what you eat, eat well
Thank You All,
Sorry for not being able to critique much this week I'm
in the middle of my busy time at work.
Glad you like my effort and I didn't offend you,Bob.
Gjbrake's comment is indeed "interesting" it's nice to see
where different people went with the same beginning.
Thanks Again,
Celt
