Year 5 Wk 28 Two Minute Love Song /Mp3 Revisited/Again

John,

I really like this song, its has great potential. The music is very catchy and the simplicity of the lyrics work well. Great effort.

Paul

Hi John

I haven't heard you sing in a while and it sounded like your voice was alot clearer and in parts was reaching some lovely notes , so what ever you have benn doing mate kepp doing it ... :wink:

2 Minute love song I was expecting the traditional

I love more ..

Your eyes are like ...

And so on , but I was pleasantly surprised with this I would suspect the message might get through , I am the most unromantic guy in the world and I got the message so there is hope for your song :lol:

"All my dreams begin and end with you "

That is so lovely mate ...

Good stuff mate

Trev..

John, you know I'm a fan. I like the idea of the two minute love song. Only downside is it leaves us wanting more. Then again, maybe that's not a bad thing.

Joe

I appreciate all your comments and think Paul said it best

I really like this song, its has great potential.

I don't think it quite reached that potential so I revisited it
and came up with a slightly different version.

Paul: This is an effort toward that potential without sacrificing
the simplicity. (Which is intentional and I'm glad you noticed it)

Trevor: I think the lyrics are now more in line with what you expected.

Joe: Sorry, I couldn't do anything about the length.
That would destroy the whole challenge and concept.

Peter: The doubled vocals were a bit of an experiment. I didn't like
the original track and mixed a second. Most of that is eliminated
(just 2 spots now) and the vocals are more up front in the mix.

Two Minute Love Song Link

Oh and the new lyrics;

Two Minute Love Song

Trying to say it in a two minute love song
All the feelings I have for you
Trying to say it in a two minute love song
Hope my message is getting through

But the words come out all wrong
It drives me crazy
Why can't I say what's in my heart

I'm trying to tell you in a two minute love song
All my dreams begin and end with you
I'm trying to tell you in a two minute love song
Hope my message is getting through

Someday you may hear it
On your radio
And understand the love that's in my heart

Trying to say it in a two minute love song
All the feelings I have for you
Trying to say it in a two minute love song
Hope my message is getting through

Thanks

John

Nice re make John

My original comment was meant to be taken in a bad way and I hope you didn't feel it was ..

Very Kool song John

Nice and laid back

I like it

Trev..

Good stuff John,

For me there is still something missing. I know the song is about how hard it is to deliver the message but I wonder if in the last verse these lines might give a bit more competion to the song:
Trying to say it in a two minute love song
All the feelings I have for you
I've been trying to say it in a two minute love song
I've been trying to say, I love you

Paul

Thanks Guys

Paul you seem to be very insightful this week.

I like what you are saying and can see very well where you are
coming from.

What are you thoughts on something like this for the last two lines?
What I'm trying to say in this two minute love song
Is I'm hoping you're feeling the same way too

John

John,

I understand that you might not want to actually say it in the song cos it kind of defeats the purpose, maybe this:
You know what Im saying in this two minute love song
Im hoping you feel this way to

Paul

How about:

But there's no way to say in a two minute love song
All the feelings I have for you

Or :?:

Combine all the suggestions into something like:
Trying to say it in a two minute love song
All the feelings I have for you
But there's not enough time in a two minute love song
To say I hope you feel the same way too

I think that works.

Yeah works for me too, gives some closure to the song. Well done team :lol:

Paul

Thanks Guys for all the help.

I love it when there is a lot of give and take during an assignment
and this one had it's fair share.

You helped me take this from a simple little song to something
I'm rather proud of.

Thanks again and I revised the MP3 one last time.

Two Minute Love Song Link

John