hey thanks for the replies,ok..verse 2 ryhmes the way i personally sing it..when recorded youll see..well hear.. that it does fit into my style of sin...

no no i do like it..but just wondered why,i kinda get the whole drift of the song..good job

pardon your french for saying what?

w.o.w hey....this is excellent,i love it and thought it was a really enjoyable read,i got the picture of the film 'stand by me' for some reason,no cri...

thanks all im kinda stuck with it at the moment im goin through a dry patch of writing,im off work you see and all my songs come from going to the toi...

hey,i dont know how fast youll be playing this but how about slowing the song down? and making the lines of the verses slightly longer? then you can p...

all i bought was a £3.50 microphone from any old computer shop....you can actually get a good sound with it,its the first step i suppose..ive got a f...

yo rejected..being a punk/indie guy myself..this is cool i like it!!And I hate the way it looks, And I hate the way they talk, I hate the way they smi...

im for it nick,sorry i should have said,really people will post it into the 'give it to me straight' board if they want compliments or critisism..even...

hmmm...maybe not the most inspiring...but the most meaningful one to me has to be 'not now' by blink 182,its about a man who goes to see his lover who...

the harsh truth could be different from one person to another though..i could say i like it..and so could 100's of other people,but if one person real...

ahhh now i get it!! maybe i just didnt take it in properly..nothing wrong with it now :wink: