no one read my songs anymore? :(

"As the lights shine brightly down upon me"Ive revised this line so it would make a little more sense. This is the new line:"As the streetlight shines...

to each there own :)

thanks alot. yeah the ooohs are there really just so i dont forget em lol. If you understand the feeling and mood behind the song they go well with it...

thanks for the input. no its not my first song, and this isnt something I play to every woman.... just one

the "ooooh" lines arnt supposed to be carpenterish, more like the Crash Test Dummies... more like a dark Chant then an "ooooh" haha

i like it, i can connect with it easily. maybe the second chorus should be moved to the end of the song, orv maybe have some sort of bridge and a vari...

most of my songs are dashboard confessional type songs, all lovey dovey or heartbreak, stuff like that. So this was a first for me to write a songmore...

oh i get it. no worries :wink: any other opinions or comments?

they are basically a more commercial version of The Used