oh, and a little alert from the Grammar Police...coarse language...not course! :D :D :D Vic

It's a good start, and it's a good story. BUT....I'm going to lay down a couple of laws here. Rule 1....never, ever, EVER use a word you haven't thor...

Some good suggestions there - going to have to have a radical rethink about this one. Damn, I really liked that chorus....those two quotes were how t...

I think...no, I KNOW...this one'll be bookmarked and it'll be on my playlist for a long time. thanks for sharing, James... :D :D :D Vic

Glad to help, James, it's gone from "great song" status to "almost perfect." There's no such thing as the perfect song*....but don't let that stop yo...

Good to see you writing consistently, Renee!This is a pretty good start....just a couple of suggestions. "Churches running scams,Shepherding the lambs...

Dammit, James, I'm going to have to bill you for a new Thesaurus...I seem to have run out of superlatives!Actually I do have one tiny quibble....at fi...

Ah, I see - treat this as a rough first draft/demo, then?Hmm....mbira's a good choice of instrument. Thinking about making your own? :D :D :D Vic

Another good one, James. Although I have to say that, like Trev, I was a little surprised by the MP3 - I also expected it to have a more African feel...

Hi, welcome to GN, and especially to the SSG - always nice to see new a new face!Glad to see you tidied this up up from the original post....reads muc...