Keep on it.Line 1 doesn't seem to hold its weightLine 2 is saying the same thing as line 4maybe something like:You can change the curtainsGreener gras...

Hi Neil and Renee, Thanks for the suggestions. They will improve the lyrics for sure. I'm on Day 1 back in the US so I've got to get over jet lag an...

Hi Balruth, Welcome to SSG :DThe first post is the hardest, so it will get a lot easier from here on ;)I really like your voice. I think it lends its...

There's a lot to like here. The verses are concise and fun to listen to. And the first two lines of the chorus are really great. +1 :D The second tw...

Thanks, Renee :D

Hi Renee and David, Thanks for the feedback :D You might want to give Harry Chapin's "Six-String Orchestra" a listen if you have the chance. Thanks. ...

That fits more in character with V1 and V3 for both the singer and singee.

Hi Renee, Good start :DI remember liking the music from a previous song...nice transplant :wink: I like the idea of this:You said you were going out ...

Hi Renee, It would be good for me to go back and try recording this with drums. That would force me to be more conscious of the tempo changes.Thanks ...

Hi David,Is there a reason the first verse is at a markedly different tempo and rhythm than the rest of the song? It works fine, but it just seems str...