Hi Bob,I like the whole rythm flow of the song and I like the possible chorus, but I don't really think it'd fit as a chorus. I don't know if it'll wo...

Okay, the bridge is going, going...gone. Thanks to the great feedback from David and Bob ;). I'm not really sure what kind of music for this yet, I'm...

Yup. I seem to have that problem with these lines too ::), only I think "but what I hear still sounds all wrong" makes it even better! Lol. Otherwise...

I really like the line "And try her best to live a little Where its a funeral every night" Awesome! The last line in the first verse seems a bit awkwa...

Okay. I was actually a little confused when I first read this, but I think I got it now. Kind of. I really like this line "crispy apple", especially s...

Thanks for the great feed back, everyone! ;D. For Honest Liar, I was thinking the verses might explain about his a bit more, so I didn't try to expla...

Hey Razor, welcome to Guitar Noise! Or, the asylum, as some of us would call it ;). I really like what you did with both the titles, which were mine'...

I really like Rings on the bedside table and the visuals it brought, and I like what you did with I'll Show you as well. (That one was mine ;D) It re...

I like what you've done with both, they were mine's ;D. For Cup of Death, this is definatly a new direction, I would never have thought of that, and ...

Both are nicly written, and I really like what you done with Addicted Conviction. The third line in Starting Last just seems out of place, and I agree...

Well first of all, both are good reading. Suffocation conjur some great images, as everyone has said. Good, not great (that was mine's ;D) is good wo...

Awesome! Sounds like rock 'n' roll :).-Laura