Hi DougGood piece of writing. It's all neatly constructed and delivered with some very good imagery. The moral message delivered in the bridge flesh...

will tell you all you need to know about getting your guitar in tune.Bob

Hi StraycatGood idea here and told very well. Lots of very good imagery which fits nicely with the intent you described. The end is really good (fit...

Hi NeillGood piece tells a good story very well.Good take on the assignment.Good stuffBob :wink:

Hi TrevThis could prove a very exciting song with both parts added together. I think musically it would be a challenge but definitely worth pursuing....

Hi PeteThe Daddy/Father switch didn't bother me as I thought you'd started off as a young child and then grown up so there was a difference that could...

Hi VicGood return to form with this one. I like theway the song follows a logical timeline your father, you, your kids your grandchildren. Makes it ...

Hi RobThere's so much tension in the words and the music it seems like it's waiting for something big to happen. You can feel the clashing personalit...

Thanks everyone it's so often the case that what you point out as bothering you is actually what's bothering me. This is one I want to keep so I'll w...

Well said Neil

Hey TrevNot bad at all and still within the broad area of the assignment. I knew when I was putting this assignment up not everyone would be able to...

Couple of thingsI've been in long dry spells (and am still in one with occasional damp patches) and the only way out is to work at it. Just write and...