Id like to smooth that first verse out a little.Especiallyand I knew he could fly You never saw him leave the ground and still express the writers bel...

Wow. Great song! Whoa here now, don't go starting all over, this is too good. I reallly like the syle.I think that what is meant about the last line...

I like it.Making those lines more concise definitely improves the reading of it. But, i've encountered times where what you're singing, and they are ...

Golden Rule  Chorus:  Do not judge me, I'm no fool  For I know a golden rule  I try and forgive what they do  Some confess 'cause they have to Â...

Good premise.Was 'the call' actual or was she just drawn to the place?It sounds a bit like the 'crossroads' scenario to me, sell your soul to play wic...

Great suggestions........No title Yet Chorus: Do not judge me, for I'm no fool Do you know the golden rule I try and forgive what it is they do Some ...

Rough copy.........No title YetChorus:Do not judge me, I'm no foolDon't you know the golden ruleI try to forgive what it is they doSome people go to c...

wow, great job. You really used the weather thing to great effect. You did exactly what you said.The imagery really works.The 'possible chorus' is t...

Moderators, any thoughts?Denim

Ya good topic. Sappy can be good if done well. Drawing emotion out. I'm hoping you conjure up images & emotions. This is the kind of song that ...

Good metaphor, good topics.

Matt, What about a verse from the parents/mom/dads point of view? It might help get the issue your dealing with out there?Maybe each verse could be fr...

Nice........Makes me think of renewal, rejuvenation, spring. I liked the verse about the son. I have 2 little ones, and the big, blank book of life ...