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Denim_Tonque
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Joined: Feb 8, 2004
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Re: SSG Week 18 - Boy

Id like to smooth that first verse out a little.Especiallyand I knew he could fly You never saw him leave the ground and still express the writers bel...

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Re: Week 16 "Smoke and Mirrors"

Wow. Great song! Whoa here now, don't go starting all over, this is too good. I reallly like the syle.I think that what is meant about the last line...

20 years ago
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Re: SSG2 - Week 16 - Illusion - Crit please

I like it.Making those lines more concise definitely improves the reading of it. But, i've encountered times where what you're singing, and they are ...

20 years ago
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Re: SSG - Week 15

Golden Rule  Chorus:  Do not judge me, I'm no fool  For I know a golden rule  I try and forgive what they do  Some confess 'cause they have to Â...

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Re: ssg-week 15-part number one!

Good premise.Was 'the call' actual or was she just drawn to the place?It sounds a bit like the 'crossroads' scenario to me, sell your soul to play wic...

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Re: SSG - Week 15

Great suggestions........No title Yet Chorus: Do not judge me, for I'm no fool Do you know the golden rule I try and forgive what it is they do Some ...

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Re: SSG - Week 15

Rough copy.........No title YetChorus:Do not judge me, I'm no foolDon't you know the golden ruleI try to forgive what it is they doSome people go to c...

20 years ago
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Re: SSG Week 15 - Bob

wow, great job. You really used the weather thing to great effect. You did exactly what you said.The imagery really works.The 'possible chorus' is t...

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Re: SSG-week 14- Red Skies

Moderators, any thoughts?Denim

20 years ago
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Re: SSG2 - week 15 - storyboard

Ya good topic. Sappy can be good if done well. Drawing emotion out. I'm hoping you conjure up images & emotions. This is the kind of song that ...

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Re: Week 15 - Storyboard

Good metaphor, good topics.

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Re: SSG2 Week 15 - Part 1

Matt, What about a verse from the parents/mom/dads point of view? It might help get the issue your dealing with out there?Maybe each verse could be fr...

20 years ago
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Re: SSG2 - Week 14 - silly putty

Nice........Makes me think of renewal, rejuvenation, spring. I liked the verse about the son. I have 2 little ones, and the big, blank book of life ...

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