This may be just my thoughts on this , but the verses seem mixed up. v3 please turn on the lights.. show me where you are.. im so scared of tonight.. ...

Hmmmmmm not sure , gonna have to check it out. I f we had to we could put a couple verses together and then the chorus.But I'm thinking it's done fast...

Thanks for the comments guys, really appreciate it. Lucy :D

Thanks for the comments Kira and G 8) It seems long but sung fast it don't lol,I guess I could drop the menu verse and it wouldn't take anything fro...

Hi Rbert,Liked your lyric, I have a suggestion for your last line in the first verse. I know you don't need to change it, it works fine the way it is....

Hi Dictator,just a little nit about the chorus, hope you don't mind.,, I know she never will Feel the same as I feel For me as I for her ...

Hi Elegance,Rock is not really my kind of thing, I like it , just don't think I can write it.You have alot of great lines in here, I have picked out o...

Hi Porr,Really enjoyed reading this, simple to the point, great job.inkpen :)

Hi Marv,I like your lyric good job. I have a little suggestion for the last verse. Hope you don't mind...You swore you heard the sirens sing The wind ...

well written song and like was said earlier on such a touchy subject you done great. I like alot of things about this song and the way you have put it...

HiIt reminded me of something like the headless horseman story. I think you done a good job on it