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sarah
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Joined: Apr 13, 2003
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RE: SSG3 - Week 1 - Ol' Hickory

Very well done! I love the imagery and the sentiment. Two thoughts: 1) Robin Hood and Little John were friends, so I'm not sure if you meant "taki...

20 years ago
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RE: SSG yr3 week 1

Excellent. I really like this.The only lines that fell a bit oddly for me were these:Wrap your arms around me Lure me in with an embrace so comfy S...

20 years ago
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RE: Year 3 Week 1

Good first draft. I like the overall idea of the song.I'm a bit confused by the pronouns in the first couple lines, however. Your black comforterhidi...

20 years ago
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RE: SSG Week 48 - sarah

Thanks for the replies.I wanted to differentiate the bridge's flow from the flow of the verses or the chorus, so I put another line in there to chop i...

20 years ago
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SSG Week 48 - sarah

Okay, now looking at the assignment again, I violated a couple of the rules about number of verses and lines in the bridge. Oops. I'll remember better...

20 years ago
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RE: Week 48 - Hell of a Party!!!

Wonderful!The only thing I can think to say is I stumbled a little bit over "chill morning air in" and "nap in front of the TV". Somehow the syllable...

20 years ago
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RE: Week 48 - First time on here, here goes nothin'

spadge -Excellent job.The only additional comment I would make is about your bridges. From my understanding, a very loose definition of a bridge is a...

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RE: Week 48 The Circle of Strife

Hey Jackal -I'm liking the song. Interesting idea and good imagery.I'm wondering a bit about the title. I don't feel how "Circle of Strife" fits in ...

20 years ago
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