Very well done! I love the imagery and the sentiment. Two thoughts: 1) Robin Hood and Little John were friends, so I'm not sure if you meant "taki...

Excellent. I really like this.The only lines that fell a bit oddly for me were these:Wrap your arms around me Lure me in with an embrace so comfy S...

Good first draft. I like the overall idea of the song.I'm a bit confused by the pronouns in the first couple lines, however. Your black comforterhidi...

Thanks for the replies.I wanted to differentiate the bridge's flow from the flow of the verses or the chorus, so I put another line in there to chop i...

Okay, now looking at the assignment again, I violated a couple of the rules about number of verses and lines in the bridge. Oops. I'll remember better...

Wonderful!The only thing I can think to say is I stumbled a little bit over "chill morning air in" and "nap in front of the TV". Somehow the syllable...

spadge -Excellent job.The only additional comment I would make is about your bridges. From my understanding, a very loose definition of a bridge is a...

Hey Jackal -I'm liking the song. Interesting idea and good imagery.I'm wondering a bit about the title. I don't feel how "Circle of Strife" fits in ...