PorrI like this. I second Vic. Fits right in with a couple of beers down at the local watering hole. Great work with the rhyme scheme. I was wondering...

Shift.I'm usually not into metal, but this was quite coolYour voice seem to fit the mood well. Hours drag on, years at a time WOW, GREA...

VicYou are actually painting a rather colorful story in gray. I like that. Lots of bright happy colors, and still an underlying sadness through it all...

PiersonYour first verse is absolutely amazing. It's been a while since I have read a verse so full of emotions like this. Hey, maybe it is just the pl...

Pbee.Love it. Nice use of imagery. Only one line got to me. Feels like a sunset boulevard Just did not seem to fit the rest, but I don't have a good s...

Chris.Nice little catchy folky tune. Brought a smile to my face plus brought back a lot of memories. Cant say I would change or add anything .Blessing...

Great job Vic!!Sounds great. Nothing to add that has not been said.You can be proud of this one.Blessings. Olav

Mary JaneI really did not think it mattered if cats were nocturnal or not. You got your point across very well, you had a great take on this assignmen...

PoeticSmile: ThanksSlowPlay: Glad I could helpYou are right about those lines so I revised them. I decided that there was no need to explain anything ...

This is awesome greybeard. The only problem with this kind of help is that one can become very lazy and not bother to go through the exercise to figur...

SlowPlayI love it. Overall very well writtenThere were just a couple places I felt like you were forcing to many syllables in to the line, but other t...

LostBBrilliant….One thing to consider.....Last line of verse 1. Cut the word “before” and make the line read “It's too late to change your min...

PbeeThe only thing I will point out is that in V1 line 2 and 4 rhymes. In V2 line 2 and 4 does not rhyme. This could be just a coincident, but I figur...