Haven't heard the first version, but those are some pretty guitarlicks you're playing there! I don't hear the Kinks in this at all though, it's more o...

Zeppelin, Blood Sweat & Tears, Nirvana, Creed. Don't have to play this backwards to get the hidden messages... :mrgreen: I don't think the first ...

Nice one! To me it reads like the story of two people falling in love.Some suggestions:I don't understand the lines "And all the junk we were told to ...

Really beautiful song, wish I'd written it :roll: In response to James and Cat, it think it would be better not to tie in the last two verses with th...

Thanks for the comment, I've had a lot of trouble in the past with making lyrics too vague for anyone but me to understand. So I guess I did it again!...

A little bit late with my comments, but I'll post it anyway:It bothered me at first that the lyrics are so abstract, but after listening to it a few t...

I'll join the choir here and say:Merry Christmas Everyone!

I like this song. The chord progression really suits the longing you're trying to express. Very melancholic. You could even repeat "you loved me" at t...

Don't worry, I still remember B&W TV and I still consider myself young... well, youngish :wink: I really like the line "nothing to color the evid...

awww, beautiful guitar playing and singing! the lyrics are great, too!loved the ambulance line from the start :D also thought John's suggestion to emp...

I think I'm getting better at understanding what you're trying to do in your songs, so here are my comments:"I cross my fingers for a fat letter"It so...

Nice one! Put some country music behind it and I'll bet you've got something good.I do have one suggestion: How about changing "It'll get you lost, bo...

It sounds a bit like the premise for the Wonder Girls' video "Nobody But You" It's a popular song around parts of Asia....I'm not sure about the rest...