nice start, lots of detail to work with.apart from the obvious rough areas i have a couple of suggestions:'as gorogeous as can be' - seems like a miss...

nice song, very atmospheric.only query is the 'And all the children keep having children' lines, surely in itself this is a good thing?maybe its comes...

thanks for the comments.i'll change the line 'Images of desert', the main offender for putting the beat off, Â to 'Their lives are empty'as for the ha...

hi laura,nice song, with david's alteration it all flows well, except the line 'Temptations flood and disbelief'.the word order seem arkward, and as i...

hi i've got nothing to add, just reading the lyrics creates a great atmosphere.as a song it'll be even betterrob :)

hi you've got a nice idea behind this song.as for finishing off the song i think you're in danger of just going on and on following in the travellers ...

hi jenlyncatyour redraft looks good to me.the allusion to the real state of affairs in the chorus is much more powerful than when you told us straight...

admittedly i had to look up where peterborough is but it turns out i'm a couple of hours away, so depending upon the details of the gig/festival i may...

hi jamir,another very effective song,only thing i'd queary is the middle line of the chorus it just seems to me like detail for the sake of detail, an...

hi jamir,one hell of a song u've got here. excellent job its epic qualities really come through.i dont really have anything to add to what david and h...

i'd say no as wellto get off the ground and some experience you'll probably have to do some gigs for free before you can get loads of people to come a...