Thanks Vic,Nice to be back, and thanks for pointing out thr grammar error, should have picked it up myself as I teach English as a second language her...

Hey Porr,Good to hear from you, nice to be back......................... but you know what I always say... only doughnuts are nice !!!!!!!!! When am i...

Hi'a Jacqui,no problem, you don't need to thank me, I've been where you are and still trying hard................... the main problem with your song, ...

Hi'a and welcome to the forumYou have exceptional potential , and this could work well as a song, let me take a little time with it during the week an...

Hi'aWell I would like to know why you are going nowhere , a bit of back ground in a form of a bridge would be good here. See what you can come up with...

Hi'a and wwelcome to the songwriting clubOK, for my personal preferance this song is too long and complicated. I used to write a lot of poetry and had...

Hi'a and welcome to guitar noise..............I would try to put this song in the 3rd person so you can picture it from another persons point of view....

Hi'a Welcome to the forumThis song has a lot of potential, but try to make it a bit more poignant by taking out the little un necesssary words for e...

Hi'a I agree with JoeIt needs an opening line and I'm praying ........ isd a good one I also can not find a rhythm here, but that really depends on yo...

Hi'aYou're frozen, throw me on the fire I'm frozen, throw me on the fire makes more senseotherwise i'm not sure who you are talking about.I always ...

Ta ever so John,It's good to be back, plus I am "sort of" playing mandolin and Oud now , so who knows what you peoples will be hearing from me next. A...

I reply with honest constructive crits when ever I can , some people take offence to what I say , and if this is the case I just don't crit their stuf...